Rejection Letters


3 & 5 Review - 10/30/12

Dear Adam, 

I enjoyed reading Jonah's Daughter, but unfortunately the piece isn't for us. It's nothing specific -- just a matter of fit. 

We'd like to see more from you, but please wait a week before sending us anything new.
Thanks again, and best of luck with your work. 

Sincerely,

Ethan Fast

69 Flavors of Paranoia - 09/17/09

Thank you for submitting to 69 Flavors of Paranoia.

We've carefully read your work and after a meeting of the minds and a round of taste tests,
the chefs have agreed your dish did have that special something - yet the flavors were not as full
as we would like to them to be. We like a little more sauce - more "kick" - more spice...
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On a more personal note:
Paranoid and horrific, and a good length for the subject matter, but it's just a bit vanilla for us. I think you may well be able to find a home for this at a more sci-fi based 'zine.

You should always double-check spelling and other grammatical errors before you submit. (In the second line, "it's" should be "its," like his or hers.)

Don't hesitate to submit again.

Abyss & Apex - 03/03/10

Dear Adam,

Thank you for submitting "Cascade" to ABYSS & APEX. It was well received here, but after some thought we have decided not to accept it for publication.
I hope you'll consider us again, and I wish you the best success in placing this story elsewhere.

Best regards,

Bonnie Freeman, Assistant Editor
ABYSS & APEX

Andromeda Spaceways Inflight Magazine - 04/11/09

Thank you for submitting to Andromeda Spaceways.

Unfortunately, your story did not pass the second round of reading, so we must reluctantly release your story. Thanks again for submitting to us, and we hope to hear from you in the future.

Some notes from the readers. These are provided in the hopes thatyou will find them useful. All these are no more than the opinions of the readers:
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Interesting, original and well written. A lovely ironic tone.
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The writing is all right. The rest of it is a fairly pointless effort at surrealism.
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Hope that's of some help, and better luck next time!

Andromeda Spaceways Inflight Magazine - 07/20/09

Thank you for submitting to Andromeda Spaceways.

Sadly, we find that we can't use your submission at this stage. Thank you again, and we hope to hear from you in the future.

Notes from the readers:
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Excellent title. Too much explaining/exposition in narrative.
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Hope that's of some help, and better luck next time!

Andromeda Spaceways Inflight Magazine - 01/27/11

Thank you for submitting to Andromeda Spaceways.

Sadly, we find that we can't use your submission at this stage.

Thank you again, and we hope to hear from you in the future.

Notes from the readers:
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It's a set-up and a setting, a couple of characters - the beginning of a story, not a real story.
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Hope that's of some help, and better luck next time!

Lucy

Andromeda Spaceways: We'll get you there ... sooner or later.
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Apex Magazine- 08/28/09

Hello Adam,

Thank you for submitting your story "The Serenity Club" to Apex Digest. Unfortunately, I am going to have to pass. It didn't hold my interest as well as I would have liked, and the horror element only appeared at the very end.

Best of luck placing this story elsewhere, and please feel free to submit again.

Sincerely,
Maggie Jamison
Submissions Editor -- Apex Digest

Apex Magazine - 12/28/09

Hello Adam!

Thank you for submitting "Defective" to Apex Magazine.

Due to the volume of manuscripts received each day, we now respond to most submissions via this form. Unfortunately, I've decided to pass on this story. Listed below are the most frequent reasons we reject a submission. Any marked reasons means your story fits into that category.

[ ] Does not have an adequate science fiction element
[ ] Does not have an adequate horror element
[ ] Fails to hold interest
[ ] Poorly edited manuscript
[X] Other

Note: The idea is good, but I would have liked a lot more story and exploration of the concept. It didn't quite feel like it was complete, even as a work of flash fiction. It's in the right vein for Apex, so please consider us for future submissions.

Best of luck placing this story elsewhere, and please feel free to submit again.

Sincerely,

Maggie Jamison
Submissions Editor
Apex Magazine

Asimov's - 05/21/10

Dear Adam,

Thank you for letting me see "Malcolms Folly."I thought the story was nicely done, but I’m afraid it didn’t quite work for me. I look forward to your next one, though.

Sincerely,

Sheila Williams, editor
Asimov’s Science Fiction

Asimov's - 09/13/10

Dear Adam,

Thank you for letting me see "The Suicide Artists." The story is nicely done, but I’m afraid it's not quite right for me. I look forward to your next one, though.

Sincerely,

Sheila Williams, editor
Asimov’s Science Fiction

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 02/04/10

Thanks very much for sending this story to _Beneath Ceaseless Skies_.

Unfortunately, it's not quite right for us. The tone of the narrative felt more external than I prefer, as though an outside narrator were telling the story rather than the Man himself.

I appreciate your interest in our magazine. Please feel free to submit again.

Regards,

Scott H. Andrews
Publisher and Editor-in-Chief

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 03/22/10

Thanks very much for sending this story to _Beneath Ceaseless Skies_. 

Unfortunately, it's not quite right for us. Although I found the role of the executioner interesting, the narrative was more distant than I prefer; I wished I knew the reasons for Birg's quest to find a replacement, and
what was at stake if he failed. I didn't get a sense of what challenges might obstruct his goal, and what Sen might be gaining or giving up by becoming his replacement.

We appreciate your interest in our magazine. Please feel free to submit again.

Regards,

Kate Marshall
Editorial Assistant
_Beneath Ceaseless Skies_

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 07/05/10

Thanks very much for sending this story to _Beneath Ceaseless Skies_. Unfortunately, it's not quite right for us. 

This tale is somewhat more abstract/experimental than we're looking for.

We appreciate your interest in our magazine. Please feel free to submit again.

Regards,

Kate Marshall
Assistant Editor
_Beneath Ceaseless Skies_

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 09/28/10

Thanks very much for sending this story to _Beneath Ceaseless Skies_. 

I'm sorry it's not quite right for us. I liked a lot about it--the gruesome yet fascinating nature of the silencing and the description of it, and the narrator's attitude about doing it. But several other things in the first two scenes felt rough to me. But I didn't feel as much of a drive from him early-on as I wanted, not just an attitude about the silencing or a desire for Nassi but something he yearned for or feared and what he aimed to do about it. He seemed instead to be more reacting to Nassi actions rather than taking as much action of his own as I was hoping.

I appreciate your interest in our magazine. Please feel free to submit again.

Regards,

Scott H. Andrews
Publisher and Editor-in-Chief
_Beneath Ceaseless Skies_

Thanks very much for sending this story to _Beneath Ceaseless Skies_. Unfortunately, it's not quite right for us. 

Although the magic system was interesting, Auchin's motives weren't clear to me, and the events of the
first several scenes didn't have enough of a sense of connection or direction to feel like they were building toward something.

We appreciate your interest in our magazine. Please feel free to submit again.

Regards,

Kate Marshall
Assistant Editor
_Beneath Ceaseless Skies_

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 05/29/12

Thanks very much for sending this. I'm very sorry it's not quite right for me. I loved the weirdness and the paper & writing theme of this world, as always, but the language of the buddy-buddy tone between Grimshaw and Chernyl felt a bit more contemporary than I prefer. I didn't quite buy that Grimshaw would put the second piece of skin on himself, after having been so careful to wear gloves earlier, and I didn't understand why at the end he let Chernyl take him over. That for me may have dovetailed with the fact that the ending for me felt more focused on Chernyl and less on Grimshaw than I thought fitting for Grimshaw being the protagonist of this tale, and I wasn't certain if Chernyl's goal would have enough significance to a reader who didn't know of the Inked Man from having read some of the other stories.

As always, I appreciate your interest in our magazine! I love the originality and tactile weirdness of this world, so I hope you will send more when you have it.

Very best,
Scott

Scott H. Andrews
Publisher and Editor-in-Chief

Beneath Ceaseless Skies - 04/18/13

"Thanks very much for sending this. I'm very sorry it's not quite right for me. I am continually impressed at your vivid off-the-wall creativity, and this story was full of vivid and unique stuff, but it didn't quite come together for me as a story as much as I needed. For example, I had mundane story issues like why Esfir would sleep with Kanz when he was clearly quite ill. From an artistic standpoint, it feels to me that the story and your vision for it transcend mundane trivialities like that, so I think it deserves a great home as it is.

You might try Shimmer, if you have not already. It's hard for me to put a finger on exactly what they like--they call it "shimmery"--but they do seem to like dark and odd and unusual. This story to me has all that, and done very well.

I appreciate your interest in the magazine! I hope you will feel free to send more when you have it.

Best,

Scott

Scott H. Andrews
Publisher and Editor-in-Chief
_Beneath Ceaseless Skies_

Bourbon Penn - 05/01/13

Hi Adam,
Thanks for submitting, "Narconaut". I'm going to pass on this one, but I enjoyed your writing and look forward to reading future submissions from you. Try us again!
Take care,
Erik Secker
Bust Down the Doors and Eat All the Chickens - 09/30/09

This has its moment, but overall it feels a little dry and pretentious, instead of experimental. Sorry, I don't think we're going to use this.

Garrett Cook, Associate Editor

Bust Down the Doors and Eat All the Chickens - 11/25/09

This was fun and I thought it might appeal to Bradley's sensibilities, but it still didn't make the final cut. Sorry. I apologize for the late response time as well. I had two books released in October.

Garrett Cook, Associate Editor

Clarkesworld - 08/24/11

Dear Adam,

Thank you for the opportunity to read "The Magic of Dark and Hollow Places." Unfortunately, your story was close, but not quite what we're looking for right now. Each month, we receive hundreds of submissions and while I may like many of them, I can only publish twelve of them per year.

I appreciate your interest in Clarkesworld Magazine and hope that you'll send us another story soon.

Take care,

Neil Clarke
Publisher/Editor
Clarkesworld Magazine

Clarkesworld - 05/28/12

Dear Adam,
Thank you for the opportunity to read "Sate My Thirst with Ink and Blood." Unfortunately, your story was close, but not quite what we're looking for right now. I appreciate your interest in Clarkesworld Magazine and hope that you'll send us another story soon.
[Note: Definitely on the right track here. I can see us accepting a story set in this universe.]
Take care,
Neil Clarke
Publisher/Editor - Clarkesworld Magazine

Clarkesworld - 08/12/12

Dear Adam,

Thank you for the opportunity to read "Drunkship of Lanterns." Unfortunately, your story was close, but not quite what we're looking for right now. I appreciate your interest in Clarkesworld Magazine and hope that you'll send us another story soon.

Take care,

Neil Clarke
Publisher/Editor - Clarkesworld Magazine

Clarkesworld - 11/29/12

Dear Adam,

Thank you for the opportunity to read "The Names Written in Broken Bones." Unfortunately, your story was close, but not quite what we're looking for right now. I appreciate your interest in Clarkesworld Magazine and hope that you'll send us another story soon.

Take care,

Neil Clarke
Publisher/Editor
Clarkesworld Magazine
Chicago Review - 12/21/09

Hi Adam,

Thanks for sending the piece. I did like it, but I'm afraid I couldn't fit it into the issue this year. Thanks for thinking of us. (And thanks to James.)

Best,

Alison

ChiZine - 11/27/09

Adam,

Thank you for sending "Defective" our way. I'm afraid we'll be taking a pass this time; the story didn't manage to engage me as strongly as I would have liked..
Best of luck placing this one elsewhere.

Cheers,
Hannah Wolf Bowen
Fiction Editor

Fantasy Magazine - 10/19/10

Dear Adam,

Thank you for the opportunity to read "Resolution". Unfortunately, your story was very close, but not quite what we're looking for right now. Please send another?

All the best,
Cat and Sean

Fantasy Magazine - 01/29/11

Dear Adam,

Thanks for submitting this story, but I'm going to pass on it. It's nicely written and I enjoyed reading it, but overall it didn't quite win me over, I'm afraid. Best of luck to you placing this one elsewhere, and thanks again for sending it my way. I look forward to seeing your next submission.

Sincerely,

John Joseph Adams
Editor

Fantasy Magazine - 05/22/11

Dear Adam,

Thanks for submitting this story, but I'm going to pass on it. It's nicely written and I enjoyed reading it, but overall it didn't quite win me over, I'm afraid. Best of luck to you placing this one elsewhere, and thanks again for sending it my way. I look forward to seeing your next submission.

Sincerely,

John Joseph Adams
Editor
Fantasy Magazine

Flash Fiction Online - 08/25/10

Adam,

Sorry for the delay on this query.

We are passing on "The Suicide Artists". It's funny in a macabre and disturbing way, which seems to be what you were going for, but it's not quite to my taste. I wish you the best in placing it.

I think I follow you on Twitter -- I recognize the clever handle. If not, I see you among some of my other Twitter acquaintances. I'll see you out there!

Regards,

Jake Freivald
Editor

Flash Me - 09/02/10

Thank you again for your submission to Flash Me Magazine. Regretfully, we've decided to decline it for publication. Following are some of the editorial comments for your consideration. Please keep in mind that all
opinions are subjective, and although we did not accept your story, it may still find a home elsewhere.

I hope you will consider us again in the future.

Jennifer Dawson
Editor-in-Chief, Flash Me Magazine

EDITOR 1: No. The storytelling format caused me to lose interest very quickly. Also, using a trademarked product in a story in this way may not be received positively by the owners of that trademark.

EDITOR 2: No. What little plot there was came too far into the story to keep my interest, and the dry, command prompt format wasn't very compelling.

EDITOR 3: No. I liked the idea of Google LIFE as it made me chuckle a few times with what it did (although I don't think using their name is a wisething). The format of the story was a distraction to me, and I didn't really start understanding it until halfway through.

EDITOR 4: No. This did not keep my interest. It seems better as a script of some sort.
Futurismic - 09/27/09

Hi Adam,

Thanks for showing us your story "Medusa on the Brain, or Loving the Mind Electric: A Cyberpunk Romance," but I've decided not to accept it for Futurismic. It's not bad, but I'm afraid it didn't win me over enough for a buy. Good luck to you with it, though, and thanks for giving us a look.

Best,
Christopher East
Fiction Editor, Futurismic

Futurismic - 10/31/09

Hi Adam,

Thanks for showing us "Google: Life," but I've decided not to accept it for Futurismic. It's definitely an amusing concept, but it didn't entirely work for me on the whole. Good luck to you with it, though, and thanks for sending it our way.

Greatest Uncommon Denominator - 01/15/10

Sorry we've kept this so long! Some things about this really tickle my fancy (the inventiveness of the shadow amuses, and the mantra's a good touch), but at base, it's not quite enough a story and not quite enough a non-story to work for me.
Best of luck with this piece in other markets.

Sincerely,

Julia de Caradeuc Bernd
Greatest Uncommon Denominator Magazine


Dear Adam Callaway,

Thank you for sending us "The Goddess of Discord Lives on Mulberry
Street". Unfortunately, it's not what we're looking for at this time.

I can see this working nicely as an actual film, perhaps, but as a
script, it's not quite as engaging a read as I'd like -- or at least,
as the short-story version was. I think it loses a lot by losing the
narrative voice(s) of the story.

Best of luck with this piece in other markets.

Sincerely,

Julia de Caradeuc Bernd
Greatest Uncommon Denominator Magazine

Heroic Fantasy Quarterly - 03/07/11

Dear Adam,

Thank you for submitting The Good Executioner to Heroic Fantasy Quarterly.

The story caught our attention but after consideration we’ve decided it’s not a piece we can use.

Please consider Heroic Fantasy Quarterly again. We wish you luck placing your story elsewhere.

Best,

James Lecky, 
Heroic Fantasy Quarterly

Ideomancer - 01/22/11

Thank you for submitting "The Suicide Artists" to Ideomancer. Unfortunately, it's not quite right for us. I was intrigued by the concept of the suicide artists and its echoes of Kafka's hunger artist, but I didn't find the epistolary format compelling--yes, it provided a reason for a story pretty much composed of exposition, but while I did pick up on the hints of who the letter-writer was (though not the first time around), I never quite got enough information about her for her story to have an impact on me as a reader.

Good luck with this piece elsewhere, and thanks for thinking of Ideomancer.

Ideomancer - 01/26/13

Adam,

Thank you for submitting "Pages Torn from the Twice Scrawl'd Parchment" to Ideomancer, but I'm afraid we have decided to pass on it. There's plenty of solid writing in here, and some ambitious world-building--a world in which words have tactile power. Unfortunately, given the time-spanning structure, I feel there's not enough holding it together. Everything--character, magic, even theme--feels too fleeting to grab me.

Again, thanks for the opportunity to consider your story. Please send us more, and best of luck submitting this one elsewhere.

Sincerely,

James

kill author - 07/11/10

Hello Adam,

Thanks for considering > kill author for your work. Having read 'How to Photoshop Out Cigarette Burns', though we were very taken with the format of the piece and its development, ultimately we didn't feel that the subject matter and some of the language style were quite suited to our journal, so we're going to pass on it. 

We wish you the best of luck placing the piece elsewhere; do feel free to submit material to us again in the future.

Best,
> kill author

Lightspeed - 11/28/10

Dear Adam,

Thanks for submitting this story, but I'm going to pass on it. The concept for this one is very weird and cool, but overall the story didn't quite win me over, I'm afraid. Best of luck to you placing this one elsewhere, and thanks again for sending it my way.

Sincerely,

John Joseph Adams
Editor
Lightspeed Magazine

Lightspeed - 10/31/12

Thanks for submitting "Snick-Snick," but I'm going to pass on it. It's nicely written and I enjoyed reading it, but overall it didn't quite win me over, I'm afraid. Best of luck to you placing this one elsewhere, and thanks again for sending it my way. I look forward to seeing your next submission.

John Joseph Adams
Editor - Lightspeed & Nightmare

McSweeney's (Web) - 08/06/09

Hi, Adam -

I'm afraid this one isn't a good fit. It reads too much like a short fiction. Our primary interest is in pop culture-oriented conceptual humor. Thanks for thinking of us, nonetheless.

Best,
Chris

Middle of Nowhere Anthology - 07/23/09

Hi Again, Adam,

I just read your story - and while I appreciated it (and it made me chuckle) - the elements of horror are to subtle to be a good fit for my anthology.

Best of luck finding a home for this well-written piece of fiction.

Sincerely,
Jessy Roberts

Necrotic Tissue - 07/16/09

We at Necrotic Tissue received your submission: "American Gothic Oblivion". After considered review by our editorial staff we have decided not to publish your story.

This story is interesting, but the ending falls flat. The reader never learns anything about the smoke or the shuffling people on the road. Are they zombies, possessed? What's going on? Sometimes open ended stories work, but this one brought no true resolution because I couldn't figure out what was going on or even where you were going with this piece. My advice is to focus a bit more on the plot. This is only one opinion, however, and some other editor may love this tale. Best of luck submitting this piece elsewhere.

Ray Gun Revival - 01/16/11

Dear Adam Callaway,

Thank you for your submission to Ray Gun Revival. I regret to inform you that we are unable to use it at this time. 

Following are some comments for your edification by the mighty Slushmasters:
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Part show, part telling, and flash. Probably not right for us. Writing isn't bad, but again, not much here as far as an actual crafted story.
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Too technical, not much of a story.
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I hope this feedback helps in your journey as a short fiction author. Thank you again, and we hope to hear from you in the future.

Kind regards,

Johne Cook
Overlord, Ray Gun Revival magazine
Ray Gun Revival - 01/16/11

Dear Adam Callaway, 

Thank you for your submission to Ray Gun Revival. I regret to inform you that we are unable to use it at this time.

Following are some comments for your edification by the mighty Slushmasters:
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Too technical. The writer does have some potential, though.
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Didn’t grab my attention and didn’t feel well-plotted to me. The ending seemed sort of random: our hero decides the thing he stated earlier was impossible is now possible. He does it, and it works out. Also, there was no mention of how these people in different (universes? dimensions?) ‘met’ each other, or came to consider themselves married.
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I hope this feedback helps in your journey as a short fiction author. Thank you again, and we hope to hear from you in the future.

Kind regards,

Johne Cook
Overlord, Ray Gun Revival magazine

Redstone Science Fiction - 04/23/12

Mr Callaway,
Thank you for submitting Chroming Amnesia to Redstone Science Fiction. We are going to pass on your story.

We recognize the work and thought that you put into this story, and it's clear that you write well. Yours is an interesting and wacky story, but it just doesn't match our ideas about what we are wanting to purchase at this time.

I wish you good fortune with your continued writing, and I hope that we hear from you again in the future.

Best Regards,

Paul Clemmons
Publisher and Co-Editor
Redstone Science Fiction

Redstone Science Fiction - 11/12/10

Dear Adam,

Thank you for submitting "Resolution" to Redstone Science Fiction, but we have decided to pass on your story.

It's well-written & we like the idea. The use of "pixel" is key to what you were doing with the story, but ultimately it overwhelms and distracted our readers, pulling them out of the story..

We appreciate your continued interest in us, and hope you find a quality market for this story.

Please plan to send us something else when we reopen after the first of the year.

Thank you,

Michael Ray
Editor
Redstone Science Fiction

Redstone Science Fiction - 06/25/11

Mr Callaway,

Thank you for submitting 'Cascade' to Redstone Science Fiction. We are going to pass on your story.
It is an interesting post-apocalyptic tale, but not the sort of thing that we're looking for at this point.

We’ll next open for submissions in late Summer 2011, and I hope that we hear from you then.

Best regards,

Paul Clemmons
Publisher and Co-Editor
Redstone Science Fiction


Adam,

Thanks for submitting 'The Suicide Artists'. We are going to pass on it, but we definitely got a chuckle from your epistolary letter.

Congrats on your recent sales. We feel pretty certain that it is just a matter of time before we match up with the right tale of yours for RSF.

Best Regards,

Paul Clemmons
Publisher and Co-Editor
Redstone Science Fiction


Thank you for submitting "Eileen Lied" to Redstone Science Fiction. We have decided to pass on your story.
This is the best story you have submitted to us. It was passed on by our assistant editor/slushreader to us, which accounts for the delay. The near future of ubiquitous computing is well-done and something I really like. The story/conflict, however, is essentially a dead wife story with an unusual, but semi-happy, ending. So, it's not the type of story we're looking to add to RSF right now. Congrats on doing so well with your writing. I was pleased to see your work featured in the M-Brane SF Quarterly #3 that contained my story.

We will reopen for submissions in February and certainly hope to hear from you again then.

Yours,

Michael Ray
Editor
Redstone Science Fiction

Redstone Science Fiction - 08/04/12

Adam,

Thank you for submitting "Jonah's Daughter" to Redstone Science Fiction. We have decided to pass on your story. We apologize for the delay in our response. Your story made it into our final round of reading. We enjoyed your story quite a bit - the best you've sent us, and it was in the very last cut.

We are still accepting submissions for our "Show Us a Better Way" contest and would be excited to see a submission from you there. September will be our last issue (for now) and we'll publish the contest winner then.

Thanks for your continued interest in Redstone SF.

Yours,

Michael Ray
Editor - Redstone Science Fiction

Ruthless Peoples Magazine - 07/23/09

Dear Adam—

Thank you for this submission. I will not be publishing it in RPM.

I think it’s a bit vague.

Kind regards

Editor
RUTHLESS PEOPLES MAGAZINE

Ruthless Peoples Magazine - 07/28/09

Dear Adam—

Thank you for this submission. I will not be publishing it in RPM.

The story lacks narrative drive; the protagonist has limited motivation and faces no worthy opponent.

Kind regards

Editor
RUTHLESS PEOPLES MAGAZINE

Ruthless Peoples Magazine - 07/29/09

Dear Adam

Thank you for this submission. I will not be publishing it in RPM.

Although I did enjoy it and smiled several times when reading, I am concerned that there isn't quite enough structure to hold the pieces together.

Please do submit further work, at your convenience.

Kind regards

Dominic Hamer

Shimmer - 05/08/11

Dear Adam,

Thank you for allowing us to consider "Pulped and Bound Monsters," but I'm afraid I'm going to pass.

I like the writing and the world building quite a bit, but the story was confusing and ran slow to me. It's not right for us, but I hope you find a good home for it soon. Please do try us again.

Good luck with your writing!

Best,
GrĂ¡ Linnaea
Editor

Shimmer - 08/21/12

Dear Adam Callaway,

Thank you for your submission to Shimmer. There was a lot to like in this story, and I really appreciated your rich worldbuilding. That said, I don't think this was quite right for us - the tone and voice of the story weren't exactly in line with what we like to publish here. I'm going to have to pass on this, but I wish you the best of luck placing your story elsewhere.
Best,

Sophie Wereley
Associate Editor - Shimmer Magazine

Shimmer - 08/27/12

Dear Adam,
Thank you for allowing Shimmer to consider "Melody," but I'm going to pass on this one.
I had some trouble with the POV in this piece--we are told things Leolani doesn't know (cannot know). I also found the plot itself a little too familiar and pat for Shimmer's liking. Best of luck with this one!

E. Catherine Tobler
Senior Editor
Shimmer Magazine

Shimmer - 09/09/12

Dear Adam,

Thank you for allowing us to consider "Pages Torn from the Twice Scrawl'd Parchment," but I'm afraid I'm going to pass.

There is a lot to love here, and I'm especially fond of Leo's scene. However, I felt that the ending was rather abrupt, and the scene with Mimi felt particularly rushed. It's not right for us, but I hope you'll try us with your next piece.

Good luck with your writing!

Best,
Keffy Kehrli
Editor
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Shimmer Magazine

Shimmer - 11/27/12

Dear Adam,
Thank you for allowing Shimmer to consider "The Girl Who Collects Paper Dolls," but I'm going to pass on this one.
I like the set up here, but overall just didn't feel you went quite far enough with it for Shimmer's liking. There is a lot of awesome, but I wanted to see it go deeper. Though we aren't taking this one, I hope you'll try us again.
E. Catherine Tobler
Senior Editor

Shimmer Magazine
Shimmer - 12/13/12

Dear Adam,
Thank you for allowing Shimmer to consider "The Names Written in Broken Bones," but I'm going to pass on this one.

While I enjoy your stories about Untitled, they seem to stand less well on their own--so it makes me wonder if you might consider approaching a publisher about a collection of them, rather than trying to sell them individually. In any case, I just didn't feel this one was a perfect fit for Shimmer, though I do love the world you show here--it's so strange, and also somehow wonderful.

Best of luck with this one--do try us again!

E. Catherine Tobler
Senior Editor
Shimmer Magazine
Shimmer - 01/14/13

Dear Adam,
Thank you for allowing us to consider 'Set Fire to her Paper Heart', but I'm afraid I'm going to have to pass. 

The ideas were interesting, but I got a bit lost, and didn't feel that I got to really 'know' the characters so it was difficult to really connect to the story. The tone was also too detached for our tastes.
These are just my opinions, of course, and are intended to give some (hopefully helpful) insight into our decision. All the best in finding a home for it elsewhere, then, and good luck with your writing!
Best,

Nicola,
Editor,
Shimmer Magazine

Shimmer - 02/02/13

Dear Adam Callaway,

Thank you for your submission to Shimmer. I thought your story had its strong points - the world you make, here, is creative and engaging, and your characters are well-developed. That said, I didn't think this story was quite right for us. I struggled a little with the voice of your story, as some times your descriptions seemed to be a little too heavy with detail. I know that sounds persnickety, but what I had an issue with was that you have so much happening in each paragraph that it was pretty difficult to grasp onto any one image and have it make an impression. The result was a overwhelming, but it also prevented me from understanding some basic things about your world until I reread parts of the story, so it was to the detriment of your story, I think. 

I'm going to have to pass on this, but I wish you the best of luck placing this elsewhere.
Best,
Sophie Wereley
Associate Editor
Shimmer Magazine

The Pedestal Magazine - 08/05/10

Dear Adam:

Thank you for submitting your fiction to The Pedestal Magazine. We enjoyed reading it but after careful consideration have decided that we cannot use it at this time.

We wish you the best of luck in placing your work elsewhere and sincerely hope that you will submit other writing to us in the future.

Best,

The Editors

Unidentified Funny Objects - 07/16/12

Dear Mr. Callaway,

Thank you for the opportunity to read "A Quarter Per Pound." Unfortunately, it isn't quite what we're looking for at this time. Sorry about the bad news, and we hope you'll sell this story at the next market.

Sincerely,

Alex Shvartsman
Editor
Unidentified Funny Objects

P.S. I enjoyed much of the story and found the "I'm on sale" bit particularly funny, but the resolution didn't do much for me.

Weird Tales - 10/06/09

I am so sorry that I held onto this story for so long, especially since I'm going to have to pass on it. Well-written but not quite what I'm looking for. Please try me again with something else.

Thanks for your patience,

Ann VanderMeer
Fiction Editor
WEIRD TALES